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Post by Twilight on Jun 17, 2009 16:19:23 GMT -5
^_^ I'm working on a novel called Starchaser. The main girl, Roza (Rose in Russian X.X *is shot*) Lives with her father, Mark. Her mother died some years ago when she was a little girl, and so her dad is the only family she has left. One day, her father gets very sick, and she's rushing him to the hospital with the only transportation she has: A moped with a riding basket attached. On the way to the hospital, she is pulled over quite roughly by an officer named Ben, and she is knocked off the scooter and flies int the street. Ben rushes her father to the hospital, taking Roza to his house after. Turns out, they were great friends when Roza's mother was still alive. Ben is only two years older than her, so that makes him 19. AANNNDDD!!!! *takes big breath* You'll have to find out when I start posting the chapters. Hehe! Mwuhaha! I'll post the first chapter by the 20th of June. Promise.
Do you think I should keep the name Starchaser?:
Do you tihnk you'll like it:
Any improvements that might need to be made to my preview?
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Post by Twilight on Jun 17, 2009 20:22:36 GMT -5
((This is my cousin posting on my account, guys.))
Do you think I should keep the name Starchaser?: I think you should name it 13 days or something,. but they have more than 13. You should make it to were they have 13 days to irradicate tyhe crime in the city like they are, and try to convince Roza that there is Crime in the City.
Do you tihnk you'll like it: Yes, have to read it first.
Any improvements that might need to be made to my preview?: No.
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Post by Quick Fox on Jul 7, 2009 17:59:25 GMT -5
Do you think I should keep the name Starchaser?: I really like that name. I think you should keep it, unless you finds something good.
Do you think you'll like it: Once I read it, I'll know for sure, but it sounds good.
Any improvements that might need to be made to my preview?: I can't think of anything, except for maybe a little foreshadowing of the future, just to make people a little more excited about it. Kinda like ' And now, Roza doesn't know if...................'. If you know what I'm talkin' about.
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Post by Twilight on Jul 7, 2009 21:52:34 GMT -5
Uh Hm, uh hm!
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